Hi! I have always been a big supporter of Linux, so when it came time to do a school project, I knew I had to choose GNU and Linux as my topic. I didn't know much about the history of it when I started, so I am not quite sure if all of my information is accurate. I was just wondering if anyone had any corrections or improvements to make.

I have posted it in low-res here


Thank you for all of your help!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Well, first of all, why did you say "How America's greatest triumph can be America's biggest tragedy" at the beginning?
The video doesn't explain it and it doesn't make sense anyway.

It was a Finnish programmer who started Linux and even if a lot of Linux programmers were from the USA, Linux is still an international product to which people from all over the world have contributed and still contribute.
And personally, I really don't see why Linux could be a "tragedy".
I would also like to note that America!=USA, even if it's widely used as such.

And I really don't get the end:
"These laptops are not the only thing that makes Linux a triumph though.
Now anyone in the world can access modern technology.
Linux seems like a triumph, but it's still a tragedy.
Linux has not even come close to reaching its full potential.
When Linux takes over the computer industry, we will have a triumph."

So Linux is a triumph, seems like a triumph, but is still a tragedy, but when it takes over, it will be a triumph???
That doesn't make any sense to me.

Some criticisms:

It doesn't flow and seems disorganised.

There seems to be bits of "filler" here and there. What is with the footage of Linus getting dunked? And the wedding photo? How about some background on Linus while this is rolling. You could talk about how he has always loved programming, his first experiences with computers, etc.

The music seems too loud, although, that might just be me. It is hard to understand your voice sometimes because of the music.

The GNU Project and Linux did not start "at the same time." Richard Stallman founded the Free Software Foundation and started the GNU Project in the mid-1980s. Linux 0.01 wasn't published until 1991.

Also, the term "GNU/Linux" is only correct if you're talking about the whole operating system, and not just the kernel. You should clarify this point.

Who says Linux is a "tragedy"??? Millions of people use it successfully on their servers and desktops. How is that a tragedy?

There are more than just the handful of distributions you named. You could talk about the fact that there are many distributions and why/how this came about.

For a 10 minute video, it seems a bit "light." There's not enough content.

what people are saying is that linux/linus is not a tragedy while your is a tragedy ... ^_^


ok , seriously ...

probably you can try this ... just take a single part out of the complete story and develop on it while lightly "skipping" over the rest ... any part will do ...



//.2 cents ...

//goodluck ...

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Hey, everyone! Thank you so much for your help! I realized that I forgot to mention a few things. First, it has to fit into ten minutes. I had so much more information that I would love to put in, but there is not enough time. Also, it is to be presented to those who think of an operating system as an abstract concept. Sorry, I had to fit triumph and tragedy into it. That was this years theme. Also, This was the best hook I could think of. Does anyone else have another suggestion? I need something that will pull in people who know nothing about Linux. I chose that one because it shows the magnitude of something that they have never heard of, but I am open to suggestions. Also, does anyone know a place where I can find pictures to use? The only places I used were search engines. I also made some of them myself. I am very short of pictures.

Thank you so much! I will try to add all this to my project.

Three comments, which are not really meant as negative criticism

1. Consider moving the mic farther away. There are too many instances of breathing or "[puh] Linux..." (or whatever) which is distracting
2. I'm confused over the remark about "America's triumph" being (perhaps) "America's tragedy". Although US businesses do use Linux extensively, Linus Torvalds is Finnish and developed Linux in Helsinki. Although I think the USA has strongly adopted Linux in certain arenas and there are numerous American developers who have contributed to Linux, I'll have to admit more than a little confusion about the comment on how "America's triumph" could also be its "tragedy". This thesis is more or less unexplored - the video does a good job describing the evolution of a few popular distros, but ignores this (apparently) central topic/theme.
3. The clip of Linus getting dunked is pretty much off topic. Sure it's amusing, but in the context of the video, it leaves the viewers scratching their heads. Does it have some bearing on the development of Linux, or is it historically significant? I'm not sure it is

Just my 2 cents
I'll reiterate my comments are not intended as negative criticism, but seeing as you are soliciting feedback I figure I'd add my 2 cents

Oh, my! I have been revising my project since my last post, and I just went back to watch the old one that I posted a link to. I am so sorry that I made you watch that piece of trash. My new project doesn't even compare. Thanks for all of your help! : ]